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Hey!

Hey, Krayon, remember me? Your worst fan, I mean, critic :). Naah, just kidding, excellent job there, you've come a long way since you started, for one, the depth and feeling behind your songs has improved a lot. I really love this song. It's been a long time since I've been able to nit-pick any of your songs and spread a little bit of contentiousness amoung the better artists here, but hey, we can't have everything. Good luck wherever you go, We'll miss your contributions to this site.
Again, good luck, God bless.
Krayon.

Winterwind-NS responds:

save the kind words for later, I ain't leaving just yet
but I do appreciate it, thanks man.
and yeah, I remember you hahah

Hmmm

For an improvement, this is better, but the song can still go a long way. You have a nice tune there but the instruments could be a bit better and you might want to see if you can create a bit more sense of flow, as in, each note is currently singularly played without any blending from the previous one.
The flute should probably be made a bit louder and clearer as I couldn't hear it properly, even with my headphones on max volume.
Try adding in some strings, they would complement it nicely and a slow rolling drumbeat would be perfect!
Good luck, see if you can find some better instrument samples, there's usually some decent ones lying around the internet if you look hard enough.

ShadowLor responds:

Thanks for the review!

Hmm...I've tried both of my computers and can hear the recorder fine. Maybe my computers are just magic lol.

Thanks for the suggestions about the strings and percussion, I think that would go nicely!

I don't really know what sort of program I should use. Finale only exports as midi, and Sibelius can't do dynamics all that well. I don't want to spend 200 dollars on a minor hobby, or seven hours patching things together. I welcome recommendations.

Much hope

Man!

Man! I need to pay more attention. I downloaded a coupla your songs a while ago but never really payed much attention. I'm sorta kicking myself right now. Just listen to your first Kyrie Elison, you should do a collaboration with Lady Arsenic, the two of you could come up with something incredible.
Considering the stuff that's been posted on the classical section lately, perhaps you should stick a few in there.
Great job!
*Continues to scrounge around for more music that might have potential for mods and movies later...

Bezo responds:

Thanks. I'm not familiar with Lady Arsenic, but I will look her up. I have been so...unprolific lately that it makes me sad.

Hmmm

This was decent but for the very dramatic circumstances and theme, this piece doesn't even come close. All those light, bright strings and whatnot really failed to bring out a sense of impending doom or action, they just seem... light... and fairylike.
You might want to really pull out the feeling by adding a lot of bass background and undertones that contrast with the foreground strings etc. Have a middle ground as well, something that carries the sense of doom and feeling behind what this song is trying to portray.

LacrimosaMuse responds:

first off, im gonna ignore the fact that ever review uve given has been ignorant in some way shape or form, i dont use strings in this song, if u read the first review, even a deaf man would be able to notice that, theres tubas shouting a D5+8 at FF, baritones doing the same, melophones, low organ manual, and organ pedals, fix ur subwoofer and stop giving ignorant reviews, learn music if u want to critique it

Great!

Amazing, all your music is the same excellent quality! What programs and samples do you use?

KaiyotiMusic responds:

Thanks Krayon, I use very customized samples. Some old AKAI and ROLAND material. Some self-recorded stuff. And then a whole bunch of emulative synth sounds.

Wow!

And I thought I wasn't going to see another author who put up music like DarkLordOblivion's way back.
Yeah I know he stole it, but the music was brilliant! this is the closest I've heard to that so far. Absolutely brilliant! I can't even nitpick it!

KaiyotiMusic responds:

Thanks for the feedback.

Great!

Excellent job! Just needs more on those drums! MORE! No but seriously, do you have any idea how much this would improve if you could get those drums to thunder? Sort of loud and earthshaking like. It does depend on the drums though. I always found that the African Djembe did an excellent job of that, you only need about ten and already you can hear them a kilometre away. A faster, louder beat on top of the one you've already got would be great, a sort of rolling thudding beat, sort of like, dakadakadakadakadakadakaDOMMMbrrrraka dakadakadoomdakdakadaka.... at around 240 beats per minute or similar.

paradoxphenomena responds:

Lol thanks again for the insightful review. I'll remember your suggestion for the next release.

Great!

Great job! Unfortunately though, you did fall slightly short though, it's FL Studio, you can't get a good orchestration out of that. So I'll forgive you till you get a good orchestration program, then I want you to sit down and think really hard about a coupla things:
Firstly, this song needs LOTS of instruments, when I think of this piece I think of a 300 piece orchestra.
There was a big issue of clarity here, don't get me wrong, this is a definite improvement on the last one but it can do with some more improvements, clarity ones mainly, the strings are muddy and so are the rest of the orchestral bits, the flutes sing but that's it.
When you do this one again, and it's too brilliant not to, bring out the clarity more, you need the bass brass creating a sorta humming undertone and then the strings and higher brass soaring with the flutes. Create several separate melodies based on the real one and weave them in and out of the flute bit, remember to keep it light, light and airy, more so than this, I want to hear every indiviual instrument and the whole at once. This song needs complexity. Also, those strings really need to be louder and have more of a crescendo, they need to build till they are loud! Think, Morrowind buildup.
Drums, those drums suck, no offense, but they really sound bad, you need to use drums closer to tampani for this song, low deep long booms is what you want for this song, not that hollow thing. The beat's about right, it needs to flow more, have a bit more alternation on the beat strokes, at the current time it's all the same. Also that shoop drum sound, whatever it is, take it out! Crescendo the drum, punctuate each 4th beat etc if you have to, but take that out!
Oh yeah, one last thing, if you ever pick up a really good sounding choir, it would go brilliantly with this song. Whatever you do though, make sure it is good, the human voice is a beautiful thing, don't cheepen it. Hey LadyArsenic here does vocals!
Do not under any circumstances try to make the changes I've suggested with FL Studio, I've seen it, it isn't capable of the sophistication I've suggested. However, Miroslav Philharmik does do a good job of that.
You really did a great job improving the song, but me being me, I can't let a gem drop by and not comment on improvements, this is one of those, every time you do a redo, I'll probably check it out and suggest changes; however, if you get it perfect, =)...
Don't drop this project, wait till you have a good set of orchestrals and a good orchestration program then do a redo, it can still do with some major overhauls. Check out Liberi Lunerum if you want an example of weaving, that song's brilliant.

studio-nightbird responds:

WOW...beggest comment I have ever recieved in both my music and flash animations. Sorry i can't do the same on the reply. But hey I'll see what i can do.

I only use one plugin for this intire song and use some sounds effects (drums) that are used in my flashes. There is however a program I so do want by EastWest. Its just the program is SO big it will require me to buy a new computer to handle it. The EastWest program comes with the most advanced vocal sound ever. When I get my hands on it. I will be remaking most of my songs with it ;). I thank you for the great advice.

Hehe as for Liberi Lunerum. His song is in the game 'World Of Dreams' along with my song 'Tokiha'. ;)

take it easy

Great!

Brilliant! I'd give this a ten if it wasn't for the fact that this song needs a redo. No seriously redo it, there's so much more you can do. Here's what I'd do:
0:29- 0:30 start a drum going, simple rolling, slow, make it resound, something like, donnn dadommdomm daaadadadommm or similar.
0:45 start a strings buildup, low chellos and some brass basses following the main tune, build in little waves, back and forth, sort of receed and build like the sea.
Keep building to a massive crescendo in 1:35 complete with higher strings and brass, try listening to the Morrowind main theme tune which can be downloaded here: http://www.elderscrolls.com/downloads /downloads_music.htm
Remember to keep the everything airy, it's one of the main themes of this song.
Then everything goes silent and the flute or whatever that instrument is rings forth
at 1:50ish bring in the strings, weave them in and out of the flute and then bring in the drums again at 2:20ish
Build another slow crescendo but this time don't make it reach its peak, slow it right down and give a nice calm finish with all the instruments sounding.
This song could also be a lot longer.
Good luck, I'm gonna be waiting for you to finish this song.

studio-nightbird responds:

you sir, Have yourself a deal. I'm going to take your advise. mix it with my own. and Redo all of this. Thanks for the really great construction review. ;)

Nice Work.

This is actually very good, I really like the way you've managed to combine the electronic with classical. What program did you use? Those are some excellent drums, although they could do with some improvements:
When the drum sections went solo they were just a touch on the bland side of things, the sound and choice of drums was excellent but if you want them to shine you really have to use several different beats and make them really work together. Make them THUNDER! Drums can shake the earth, these ones were quite a bit this side of that. I know you did have several different types, which was great, you sorta missed the middle guys though. You had the lighter backing and the heavy bass but the middle ones were missing, you needed to have a middling range drum that had a smoother beat to fill in the gaps. It's hard to discribe, but take it from me, drums sound amazing when you really work through the beat and have several different beats and drum types going, I've heard it before. They only had about 10 drums but I think they would have caused a minor earthquake if they'd been any louder. I think what this piece needed was a rolling heavy, loud beat, no I'm not talking about the one you've already got, but rather, on top of what you already have.

paradoxphenomena responds:

I will work on the drums as you seem so passionate about them and it does sound like a great idea.

I'm a Christian, and I'm perfectly willing to debate theology if you want.

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