Krayon's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Shadows of Loneliness]

Good.

Well, I listened to this one several times through without it getting annoying, which already rates at least 8 on my scale.
Nice feeling, though I really didn't catch the fear. You got the sadness, even if it didn't fully touch me.
The fear: Perhaps getting LadyArsenic to do some eirie vocals would help, or a violin. Otherwise you'd need to change the whole tune, piano's ain't so good for fear. You can do it, but there are better instruments for that.

The sadness: Ok, so you got that bit decently, but it still doesn't have enough feeling for a piece that's supposed to have so much background and feeling in it.
What I mean is, you're giving this a half hearted go. Don't do quiet and then louder. Poor energy into it. Hit those keys hard, inject raw passion into it, then, when you hit the quiet and stroke those keys, it's so much more effective. In other words, if you want real feeling, you gotta be feeling it from the core, for the sections with more power, you gotta work up a sweat. Ok, perhaps not that literrally, unless you do that in about 5 mins, but you get the idea. That's sorta essential for a song like this one which should have parts with passion in it.

Now onto each section:

1. If it's supposed to be powerful, where's that sweat breaking passion? Where's the heart crying to be free?! Nope, didn't cut the cake, sorry.

2. Not sure about this, generally when you're running, it's andrenalin pumping through your veins, not tranquilliser.

3. This one got me. Good job. You captured it beautifully, although it perhaps got a little fast around 4:45 and I did have some issues with the thinking about what the villain was going to do with her, since that would probably make her fearful, not sad.

4. Yeah, fair enough, finisher.

Generally, this piece was speculative, rather than carrying the things you wanted to really say. It seems more in line with someone thinking about a sad past rather than fearing and running.

It was still decent, anyway.
Krayon

Jabicho responds:

Oh man I must tell you, I always love your honesty in your reviews, thanks for telling me the good and bad things, they help me a lot.

It's cool to know you can hear it lot of times without getting bored, I think that's hard to get and I'm proud to accomplish it. hehe yeah the sadness is the dominant feeling here I'm gonna get better at making fear tunes. thanks for taking the tim to check each scene, it means a lot:

1. hehe yeah, I think it needs more strong changes, I'll keep improving.

2. lol the tranquilizer part made me laugh, you're right, I think it's not the "run for your life, he's behind you!" feeling captured in this part, but more of a "oh man... why does all these things happen to me" feeling =P I'll work on my "stress and desesperation" feeling a lot.

3. Thanks so much for that, I'm glad I got the melody compatible with this scene.

4. lol :P

Hehe yeah, I noticed most of my pieces give a reminiscence feeling when you hear them, I think it comse a lot of influence that I try to think of things that happened to me or saw somewhere to use as inspiration.

Thanks man, your support means a lot, take care!

[We Belong {=MMD=}]

Nice

It's got a rollicking beat, great vocals, and dodgy electrics. Everything we'd want!
What? You think that electric in the background does any justice to the music? It's great in the choruses when it just drowns itself out in muddy distortion, but the rest of the time? Eurgh. Get that thing set up with more bass and clarity. It want to hear it and feel it, not wonder if you're trying to strum a tin.

Otherwise, excellent job. Though a piece of advice on the guitar, clip the strum pattern a bit more and you can do wonders to beat and strum patterns, sound and other delicious bits of guitar playing by playing with that palm mute. Vary positioning, from up the fret board to the bridge and test out different ways of using palm muting. You'll see what I mean. Also, hammer ons are great for faking strums if you hammer on just before the strum.

Another great song! Keep em coming!
Krayon

[Clenastro {=MMD=}]

Good ta see ya!

You know, it's really really good to see one of the older musicians around here uploading some more music. Great to see you here again. I don't know who all these new artists are but I gotta say they still don't have that clout that your music always holds.

Great job, as always. I deducted a mark for clarity, it's a bit murky and indistinct in some places. Of course, that depends on the situation, this would be great for creating atmosphere.

Krayon.

[[oove] Heartbeats]

Beautiful.

Beautiful. I could write a thousand words to say why. But in the end, it's because it touches my stone cold heart. I listen to music all the time, I've heard a thousand songs on Newgrounds, but I can say simply that there are very few that have truly succeeded in going deeper then my ears.
You've succeeded in doing what every musician should aim to do. Touch the heart. That's what music is all about. Because that's what life's all about. The heart, the soul.
If you want to make another version, orchestrate it. Subtlely weave in strings an drums to complement the piano.
IMO, anything else would probably ruin the feeling.

Krayon

broove responds:

Ohh.. thank you. It's a very soulful review.
About another version.. I know that this particular feeling most propably will be gone, but something else might appear. I don't know yet.. will see.

[The Beating of My Heart]

Good.

This piece was good, it had a nice sense of feeling, which, in my opinion, is one of the most important parts of music. There were some little niggles however:

You had good feeling, but you could have spent a little more time on this, remember, the silences can speak as loudly as words, considering the title it could have been a little more broken up, like the beating of a heart.

Otherwise, great sense of melody and feeling. Keep it up!
Krayon

Jabicho responds:

Thanks man, your help is always great, I take all your suggestions to improve, so it means a lot. Thanks again!

[A Breeze Of Reminiscence]

Hmmm

I like it. It's really nicely played and has a good melody, but I would suggest you apply more feeling and dynamic to your songs. Also, try to get in more depth and erm... forgotten the technical term, noise levels, so go quieter and louder at the right times to really pull us listeners in and carry accross feeling. Also, silence can speak as loudly as a note can. Or the finishing of a note as it dies away.
Otherwise great song.

Jabicho responds:

Thanks for that, your help means a lot, I'll take all your advice to improve my friend! thanks again!

[Beautiful Chorale]

Lacking

Chorales are beautiful, but only when done properly. This one sounded flat. There was no passion, no feeling and no power behind those voices, all of which should show themselves when you are doing something with the human voice.
Poor transitions between notes. I doubt that was supposed to be articulated, because if it was, that went badly too. I want to hear smoother changes between notes, ie steady incline, not sudden change.
Louder, needs to be a lot louder, and get a better choir, that one doesn't cut it. The human voice is too difficult for a computer to simulate yet. You should think about getting a music pack that has proper vocals in it. Eastwest has one that's good.
The piano didn't really fit all that well. And it didn't really carry any melody or general song feeling behind it.
Sorry. You should try that again.

[Pondering (simondaum)]

Really nice.

This reminds me of Oblivion quite a bit, or more in the direction of the Oblivion music mod I got. Really, very soothing.
Good job, I like it. Although I probably would have added a bit more depth to it, you know, going deeper like.

[Tasteless Classical Music]

Aaaiiee

Aaah, my ears! My goodness, ach! Urghh!
That was the most horrible sound I've ever heard. I was almost literally sickened by it. It not only perfectly fits the theme but covers everything you have there.
After listening through, I notice that you did do a good job at making one of the most horrible disharmonies and off key sounding pieces I have ever heard.
Kudos.

Stickserious responds:

...indeed :)

[Animated Youth]

Welcome

Good job for your first piece. I believe that Lacrioso or someone similar will probably address the technical issues, however I will address the sound.
First of all, make sure that you name the song correctly, it's one of those things that people like me get antsy about. This was much more suited to "Childhood" or something like that.
You created a enjoyable theme and carried it through nicely, however it does get just a touch repetitive sometimes. Try to minimise repetitiveness, since it tends to jar on the ear and get annoying.
Get a decent orchestration program and intstruments and expand this one. It would go well with some sweeping strings and brass. On that note, you could really bring a bit more of the dramatic, powerful feel to this song. Bring more depth and backing, some bass melodies to tie off the higher melodies would have been great.

Kriegless responds:

Thank you very much for your review. Do you have any suggestions for an orchestration program? Right now i just basically recorded it manually (really annoying), and i edited it with "Adobe Soundbooth". Thank you again for your review and I hope to produce more music very soon!

I changed the name i hope you like it.